Thursday, 24 November 2016

Editing a Paragraph

Original
when it was our last day camping out in the bush my friends and i discovered that there was a bush that was really rare because there wasn’t that much bushes around because it was actually a huge forest it looked so amazing it had the smell of chocolate and strawberries on the outside it looked just like a stinky old bush


Change this paragraph
When it was our last day camping out in the Bush my friends and I discovered that there was a Bush that was really rare. The Bush didn’t really have that much bushes around because it was actually a huge forest it looked so amazing! It had the smell of chocolate and strawberries on the outside it looked just like a stinky old bush.


Walt: edit a paragraph so that it has the correct punctuation marks and makes sense

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