Well done on making these sentences more interesting and detailed. I particularly like the sentences about telling mum the news because you gave more detail about where you were and what the news was about, and also the sentence about the thunder because you added more information at the end.
Hi Kerstein,
ReplyDeleteWell done on making these sentences more interesting and detailed. I particularly like the sentences about telling mum the news because you gave more detail about where you were and what the news was about, and also the sentence about the thunder because you added more information at the end.
Great work!
From Miss Nalder
Thanks
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