Tuesday, 12 May 2015

Creative Paragraphs- Man In Space

Man in space.jpg This week we have been learning to rework our writing to make our paragraphs interesting for our audience. 
We started by writing a creative sentence about this picture. As a class we will choose Nate's sentence because we liked it the best and wrote a paragraph each to follow the chosen sentence. 
Here is the beginning of my story that starts with Nate's sentence.

A spaceman bravely walks out into the icy milkyway. As he gets out of his vehicle he is so surrprised that he is floating. Behind him he sees a glowing.

As he turns he sees the glowing is coming from a big planet called Jupiter. Jupiter is so big, not normal big, enormous big.

Jupiter is the planet that he has been searching for. He was searching for it because he wanted to impress his mum because his mum thinks he can never see Jupiter. He called his mum and said “ See mum I told you I would find it” he said.

He called his boss and said I did it boss. And his boss said “Did what” said his boss. “I found the planet” Yay! Agent you have finished your misson. 


  1. Nice work kerstein keep it up with all the good work. :)

    From Teija

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    2. Thank you very much Teija
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